Raps to Broken Piano by L_A

[Spec K]

I have made some raps to L_A's "Broken Piano", if anyone wants to see them. Their not my best, but I like it. I'll post if ya'll want to see it.

Just for info, I'm not a hardcore rapper, I like to base myself of Jadakiss and like the Black Eyes Peas. Let it flow lyrically.....

[White Chedda]

yea, post ya shyt, imma give yu sum feedback on it if yu want

[Special_K]

Aight, I like your raps man so your feedback means alot. Here goes....the first two lines are the chorus

this pain that i feel inside
don't know if it will ever subside
but if i end up losing my mind
just better read me my last rites

so if i feel that its my time
then i'll lyrically run by
line after line
no mo sunshine
my life's benign, left out to die
heaven send me down a sign







Lord, i don't know whats happenin
Children on da street
Dad's an addict, mom be slappin them
Flackin em'
I don't know Lord
Why can't there ever be peace
Why every day I have to wake up
to the sound of police
How come poverty's so widespread
Why half thier families in jail or dead
Why when I look in the paper
Another soldier was filled with lead
Shot while he was asleep in his bed
bright seeping red
why jada said,
why can't their be peace man

CHORUS`

The ghetto looms larger
engulfing everyone like a flame
burning stronger burning longer
A kid gotta grow up wit no father
Drug money enfluencen' him
Setting up his life to become a martyr
No more values in this society
kids now aday's admiring piracy
and though they all fall around me
i shall take a knee
and pray to the the good one
to look over thee
to make me beleive
thats there is still hope for
another day
another life
another dream


1st part CHORUS

No answers
so many questions
No influence
yet so many lessons
We gotta learn to live
cuz life is just a gift
allowing us to share
in a fake bliss
a premature exuberence
for weak-hearted and the shallowest
and if we can just learn
to turn the other cheek
to stand side to side with the meek
then we can truly say
that there is no more pain
for the day
no more pain
for eternity

2nd Part CHORUS

[Swisha]

OOh like the raps man u got skills keep it going
If u don't know who dis is this is L_A but on backfire I'm known as chi towngangsta so bare with me keep the song going I like dat oh yeah big mike my boy is gettin a mic for his computer he just ordered it in a lil bit I'll be a producer and a rapper wut nucca ;D

Thanks JB for lettin rep my stuff under the backfire name

[Special_K]

Thanks L_A, I like your work on newgrounds, thats why I did the raps to "Broken Piano" that all I could really put down cuz the song is only like 2 minutes or whatever. But I fucking love the beat to it. Left me inspied. Thanks again,

Spec. K

P.S. I'm new to the whole online rap thing so what would I need to do to get my raps to these beats out there??

[Swisha]

Yo I just submitted A rap on newgrounds check it out man
It's called end of days (LA rappin) tell me if u like it so reveiw it

[White Chedda]

i love ya concept and sum them lines are good, but tha linez seem too short, maybe yu end up rappin them nicely, but whenever ive seen short lines like those, its sounds choppy wit too many breakz...

but no doubt yu should keep doin wut yu doin, juss keep uppin ya skillz

~1~

[Special_K]

Yeah I know what your saying about the lines, I think I rap them pretty good I just wish there was a way I could post them or sing it somehow. I don't know, thanks for the feedback though man, I appreciate it.....

[White Chedda]

yea yu kno it, imma start a freestyle thread soon so make sure yu check by and come and drop sum linez so we can all constructively criticize eachotha.

[One]

yo! my BF playas!!! wuts crackin!! in about 3-4 more days my studio will be cimplete and i will drop my new song called "One" the the delucks and chitown collab beat....i'll post it on here so you guys can get the lyrics but you gotta here me flow it man it's tight.......hope ya'll like it. . . . . .

[One]

(speech)

One mic, One rhyme, One time, One life
to dominate the game and i gotta do it right
new name ONE new game some
had to twist my spit just a little bit
so when i make my come back niggas be like "OH SHIT"
did you hear that, could you feel that
like a heart attack hit you in the chest
and you fall on your back go inta cardiac
tell the paramedic to resesitate this nigga
with the defibulators
doctors gonna ask "wut happened here son?
was there foul play involved or did you hear ONE?"
"it's an epidemic, a killin disease, most who
hear hiz shit drop to their knees"
i spit my rhyme at 400 degrees
there can only be One so off my N-U-T's
i'm back in the game no more playin around
i'm takin all your shit, face down on the ground (ground) (ground)

(x3)there can only be
(x5)One

(speech)

reppin B-A-C-K-F-I-R-E ya'll know me
i'm O-N-E i used to be Blak Lungz or Mr. Dopey
no more funny names, i'm serious in the game
lyrics so sharp when they cut they leave a scar
thats a little present from this nigga name One
when i put your name on blast your entire life is done
i only spit the truth and you can quote me on that son
punch you in the lip if you try to test my shit
16 stitches and you know this is it, you just been hit
for actin like a bitch, i told you i don't play
and i'm gettin serious, you try to battle me and you'll go dilerious (isss) (isss)

(chorus)

[Swisha]

Oh me and u need to do a collab wit that beat
I think me and u got the best
rap skills in BF(not tryin 2 diss anyone)
Can u send me the song
before u submit it

[One]

fo sho my nigg! it's all good in the hood, i'll pass it on over when i get it layed down